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Friday, October 14, 2011

sentence completion- broken heart


The first girl who broke my heart was my friend who I had known for a few months. The day I talked to her was when I tried to make her laugh during lunch. Everyday I would try to but I never did, but oh well her smile was all I needed to see to make the day last. Once the year ended I talked to her and texted her a few days into the summer and I finally had asked her out when I asked her out I had felt happy and more then happiness. I talked to her the entire summer we would text during the day and talk at night they were the best days. A few weeks into the summer she would rarely be happy about not seeing each other as I was but I tiered to make things work out by making plans to go somewhere she would always say no. knowing how things were the happiness that I had felt turned into something frightening, or sharp pain of fear I knew what would happen later. I tired to make things last as long as could for the entire summer through calls and texts like usual. When the first day of school came I was anxious to see her smile I had felt the happiness the first time I met her. I was glad to see her but as the nights of the few days went by the air had no smell, the sounds were silent, and the nights seemed like torment of a thousand tears and sobs knowing the outcome of my relationship. When I would think about it I would feel my chest tighten as if my own body was giving me a hug to take away the pain and sorrow I had felt. I never could believe to feel the happiness I did then for it to be sucked up like a black hole in space leaving no trace of anything, the words of the night still ring in my ears I knew it had been said but I didn’t want to believe it. ”I think it should end” was like a gunshot through a piece of rice paper, my world bad been destroyed, my life had been a lose as when I heard those words all I could say was “okay” in a crocked voice from hiding the tears that ran down my hot face from a hot summer school night. I knew that I had felt no pain as strong as this for I knew it that I had become heart broken.

2 comments:

  1. Good story overall, Amazing similes and different ways to show/express what it felt going through that experience of losing someone dear, felt the sadness myself just by reading.

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  2. Awwww I wanna cry! Very well written, nice figurative language!

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